Mary DeVries
1 min readJul 31, 2021

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Thanks for sharing Rose. I know the frustration of trying to second guess curation. I don't think jail is a thing but occasionally a missed story or two makes me go WTF.

I'll start with your digital product story. If I had to guess on the curation front I'd say it's the title. I'm just guessing but I don't think Medium likes titles that suggest one answer without revealing it in the title or subtitle.

The other thing I think your story could benefit from is tightening it up a bit and maybe adding subheadings.

I was also thrown by the first sentence. You call yourself a commerical wet dream but the word commerical here doesn't make sense to me. If you changed it to marketer's I think things would flow better.

I think you are trying to say marketers should love you because you are an easy mark if they treat you right. Commerical just throws me.

You have a ton of good thoughts in here and your voice comes through nicely.

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Mary DeVries
Mary DeVries

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I delight, despair and write about a life lived around the world. Fueled by Yorkshire Gold tea.

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